Aquila flies over the desiccated veld, periodically checking on the hunters who march like ants across the dry savanna beneath his substantial eagle wings. Owab is the youngest of the band; it is to him that Aquila carries the mystical connection.
Now in early autumn, the earth still waits for the rains. The ground is dry and the game has scattered. They travel east to the purple mountains in search of the great beast who, with a nod of his gracious head, will call the storm clouds.
Over the parched soil
the eagle leads us onward
seeking the Rain Bull.
Photo by Nigel Whitehead, on-safari.co.za
Written in response to two challenges:
– Di of Pensitivity101‘s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge – NOD, SUBSTANTANTIAL, PERIOD
– Denise Farley of GirlieOnTheEdge‘s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt – CONNECTION
I also set myself the additional challenges of confining my piece to 100 words exactly and writing in the haibun form. Just for fun!
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I like how you’ve started this story.
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Thanks, Sadje! We’re beginning a fantasy quest that’s rooted in the history of the people who once lived here in the Western Cape.
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I thought so too! Looking forward to reading more.
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I adore your story telling technique
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Thank you, Mich! 🙂
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This is great Chris.
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Thanks Di 🙂 and thanks for the prompt!
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You are most welcome. Glad you could use it.
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Quite the challenge you set for yourself. Well done on all counts.
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After reading this, tagged you on Twitter so you could check out a new poetry journal in case you were interested. Cheers!
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I’ll have a look, thanks, Sarah. I’m already interested!
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Thanks very much, Sarah 🙂
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soar and always and forever more fly high
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The tribe is counting on Aquila!
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There is something about that mental image, I feel for Aquila.
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The task lies heavily on his wings… but he’s strong and wise (we hope). 🙂
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I enjoy your weekly craftmanship on prompt challenges. They showcase your skillful and artful writing. 💚
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Thanks so much, Cassa 🙂
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Reading your haibun, I could feel how parched the land was as the eagle soared above it. And I’ve always liked the word “aquila.”
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Such is the land up there. Aquila is also the name of a posh game lodge not so far from Cape Town!
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Interesting about the name of the posh game lodge!
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🙂
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The haibun is amazing. Enjoyed the story.
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Thanks so much, Kritika! 🙂
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Welcome 🙂
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I have more to say.
I could form images with your sentences which is what I love. Diving in the imagination of writer. And your stories always has a magical element. Always enjoy reading your stories.
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Thank you so much, Kritika! I’m delighted that you enjoy my work and your compliment means a lot to me. 🙂 For what is a writer without her readers?
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Exactly!
My pleasure always 🙂
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Great piece, Chris. Thanks for the intro to haibun. Until this post, I’d never heard of it before, and have now had a quick look into what it is. You’ve just helped me fulfill my “learn something new every day” thingy.
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It’s relatively new to me, too, Susan, but I rather like the form. 🙂
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👍👍
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Thank you! 🙂
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Wow!!! Great story telling, Chris. I loved every bit of it. 🙂
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Thank you so much, Aishwarya 🙂
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Such a mystical story! I loved this!
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Thanks so much, Susan!
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A still-life in words.
The image (at the top of your Six) is perfect… grabs your attention and leaves you finding more and
within.
This Six is very much like that, in prose. The sense of action is subtle, the implications contained
in each line more than enough to hold our attention.
….cool
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Thanks, Clark! I appreciate your kind words.
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Wonderful Six, Chris. A visual piece, there’s so much beauty in the implied starkness or perhaps it’s the beauty of the eagle’s quest. The image at the outset – the golden color with lighter shading – gives the illusion of high temperatures and makes it much easier to imagine the veld below.
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I’m so pleased you took so much away from this, Denise. I’m sure Nigel, the photographer, will be delighted with your observation. His studio’s in Cape Town.
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I always enjoy your haibun and this is a great take on the prompt, this particular and vital connection.
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Thanks so much, D., that’s a lovely compliment. 🙂
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I like the haiku.
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Thanks, Romi 🙂
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Excellent!
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Thank you, Mimi!
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A lovely haibun, Chris.
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Thanks, Robbie!
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A Jolly Good Morning to you Chris 🙂
Wishing you a lovely day ahead 🙂
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…and to you too, Rory 🙂
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Thanks Chris 🙂
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I stumbled a bit over the early repetition, but enjoyed it immensely thereafter.
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So pleased you discovered it recovered itself 🙂
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Wow Chris. This deserves a sequel ❤️
And the extra challenges 😱
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Thanks, Jude! I think these characters are worthy of a short run… more next week 🙂
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Yey💜
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You really make the scene come alive. I feel the heat and the dryness. Waiting to know what will happen between Aquila and Owab. Beautifully told. Chris.
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Thanks, Jenne! I’m wondering too 😉
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May they get rain although I doubt the great beast will be of much help.
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Never underestimate the power of the Rain Bull!
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Nicely executed haibun. Gentle, yet fierce.
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Thanks, Lisa!
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What a lovely sense of vista this brought me – a real sense of dry heat and a lazy riding of the winds…
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What a beautifully written comment, Matthew! Thank you 🙂
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[…] In case you’re wondering what in the world is going on, the previous episode of this little adventure is here. […]
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Full of images and nature and spirit. I like all the movement in this as everything waits for rain.
I rewound from the current 6SS to get my footing as I missed last week. Nicely done!
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Thanks, Ford! I’m pleased you came back to catch up 🙂
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bravo 😀
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Thank you! 🙂
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Off to a good start. Love the atmosphere!
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🙂 🙏
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