Flash Fiction / writing prompts

The Jade Camel #4

Chris Hall73 Comments

Previously

A gust of gritty air greeted Joey the moment he stepped outside, his keen eye falling on the bright blue ink of a bank note tumbling among the accumulating detritus scudding across the path. He scurried over, the front door slamming behind him, and fished a fiver from heap of kinked crimson leaves and dented dull-hued wrappers – a brand new five pound note! what were the chances of that? – his luck was surely changing.

Driving the note deep inside his back pocket, Joey headed towards the bus-stop with a spring in his step, sure of success in trading his new-found prize, and with none of the normal sinking feeling which frequently dogged his steps.

Joey’s fingers curled around the smooth curves of the jade camel nestled within his parka pocket as the bus lurched around the corner, offering him a panoramic view of the river Mersey from his privileged perch on the front seat of the top deck.

A huge four-funnelled cruise liner was entering Liverpool Bay, Joey wondered what it would be like to sail on such a vessel; he squinted to read the lettering on the curving bow: RMS Redemption.

Joey’s grip tightened on the camel.

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Written in response to two challenges:

Di of Pensitivity 101’s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge: INK, KINK, SINK
Denise Farley of GirlieOnTheEdge’s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt: REDEMPTION

More #SixSentenceStories here!

Photo credit: illustration from a book somewhere on my bookshelves which I cannot presently locate 😉

73 thoughts on “The Jade Camel #4”

  3. What a riveting story! Joey had great expectations, but the twist.. you know how to write a memorable piece. I could almost clearly see Joey, imagine him, feel him, and the surprise that awaited him grabbed my heart. A great display of creativity, Chris. Keep up. 🌟

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  15. “oh, Miss, Miss! We’ve decided. We’ll all have the fresh foreshadow salad. Perhaps with a nice foreboding dressing?”

    I could smell the air, a mixture of salt water and diesel fumes. (Such is my internal special effects department.)

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  27. Catching up, Chris. I love how Joey found a fiver, had a spring in his step, and even grabbed the top floor front seats of the bus. Then his thoughts about sailing away on the cruise ship… how long can the Jade Camel inspire him, or will it turn on him when he least expects?

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