Rivalry for water amongst the creatures of the veld is driven by scarcity, and the pretty acacia-fringed pan is keenly guarded by a bright green boomslang. The uniquely big-eyed tree snake hangs watchfully, waiting for careless trespassers.
The hunters hasten to the precious liquid, heedless of Aquila’s warning. Young Owab runs with his companions, raising his eyes skywards, searching for the great eagle’s reassuring presence.
They jostle for position by the muddy waterhole but thirsty as he is, Owab hangs back; he calls out, anxiously reminding them of the danger.
The serpent slithers
unhinges its jaws to strike;
the eagle attacks.
Previous episodes of this little African adventure are here.
Photo credit: Pinterest – a beautiful, big-eyed boomslang – not so lovely when it slides past you when you’re sitting on your stoep minding your own business, although it was in a game reserve, so more the snake’s habitat than mine!
Written in response to two challenges:
– Di of Pensitivity101‘s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge – REMIND, PRETTY, UNIQUE
– Denise Farley of GirlieOnTheEdge‘s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt – RIVALRY
I also set myself the additional challenges of confining my piece to 100 words exactly and writing in the haibun form. Just for fun!
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Great addition Chris.
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Thanks, Sadje! 🙂
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Always a pleasure
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water food
and the mood
of that snake in the grass
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Deadly!
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fatale
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Oh dear! Snakes!!!!!!!
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coiled up . roiled up. cold blooded seeking heat to get a moving my friend.~
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Absolutely! Very oh dear!!
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Boomslang! great word for a snake
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It is, isn’t it? Very literal though. In Afrikaans boom = tree and slang = snake 🙂
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Huh interesting…well that makes sense then!
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Brilliant!
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Thanks, Di 🙂
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Great post! Thank you for sharing
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Thanks, Luisa!
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🙏💜🙏
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Drama at the waterhole. Enjoyed this, thanks!
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Thanks, Jacquie, so pleased you enjoyed it!
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😬 I’m going to guess that the eagle will save the hunters from the snake… or will he attack the hunters to save the snake??
Love the suspense! 😀
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My money isn’t on the snake! But who knows… 😉
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*shudder* It’s bad enough when snakes are on the ground!
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And these ones are very venomous… eish!!!
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Even worse . . .
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🙂
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Oh I don’t like things that slither 🙈
~B
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No, me neither, B. Especially when one’s only a few feet away!
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Takes me to Animal Planet or Discovery Channel episodes 🙂 though I don’t like the reptilian stuff.
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Oh yes, Reena! I enjoy both of those channels (ex the snakes, strangely lizards are fine). My favourite channel is Wild Earth Safari though. Not sure if that would be broadcast in your part of the planet.
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I can imagine the scene vividly.
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Excellent! I’m so pleased it worked for you, Romi 🙂
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Damn*
*the highest of compliments on a Six that is satisfying to read on a number of levels: the imagery, the hook (or whatever the term for engaging the Reader) and the conclusion… kinda Fabergé when ya step back and try to figure out it was done**
** yeah, part of what I enjoy about these Six Sentence Stories… trying to figure out how the writer accomplished the effect
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Thanks, Clark! I wouldn’t try too hard to figure out what’s going on in the murky depths of this writer’s mind 😉
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Nice build up of suspense. I take it the eagle got there just in time.
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Thanks, Frank! I’m hoping so 🙂
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Love that word “boomslang”. Would sound way better yelling a warning than yelling “snake!” (Funnier in my head I guess, lol.)
I love the idea of the eagle as protector, of what/how it represents to young Owab.
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When that boomslang slithered down from the roof of the stoep I thought I was yelling, but such was my alarm that no word escaped my lips!
On a less scary (maybe) note, I expect we’ll be seeing more of how Aquila and Owab’s relationship develops. 🙂
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Being aware of one’s environment, even what is in the sky and trees above, may be the difference of life and death.. You painted a great wordscape landscape. Go eagles!
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Very true, Pat. Out in the veld, one must remain alert. I’m so pleased my words took you there!
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You have to always be on the watch.
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Quite so, Mimi 🙂
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Nice tension building there, Chris! Meeting that boomslang must’ve boosted your heart rate that day. 😬
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You’re not kidding, Susan. Shaking all day!
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Such poetic language and the very sounds of the words! ‘The uniquely big-eyed tree snake hangs watchfully, waiting for careless trespassers.’ I hear the hissing… You’re so at home in the descriptions and are introducing me to a country I don’t know at all. Yes, yes, I know it’s a story, but the background… And a new word: boomslang. I’ve not managed to read the previous episodes yet, but today I will. Your writing invites me to know more. Excellent piece.
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Thanks so much for this lovely feedback, Jenne! It’s a beautiful country to explore.
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In just a few words I was taken away to a different country! I always used to like snakes when I was younger because we shared the first letter of our names – now they just fascinate me. Also, I liked how my Dutch allowed me to understand that little bit of Afrikaans – in Dutch, Boomslang also means tree snake.
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I’m so pleased you enjoyed this! Speaking Dutch, you’ll have little difficulty with Afrikaans and interestingly, Afrikaans has a very similar vocabulary to Frisian 🙂
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Thirst leads to carelessness. The terseness of the syllabic poem is like the strike of a serpent, or an eagle.
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Thanks, D. I’m so pleased the action came through!
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Can understand that rush for the water, all save for Owab who was cautious. The thought of the snake dangling from the tree in wait is shiversome! Aquila… help!
Good one, Chris 🙂
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Thanks, Ford! I’m sure Aquila will save the day… for some of them at least.
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Eek! Boomslang!
Love the word, though, it’s new to me! I don’t mind snakes from a distance, Chris, which is where they usually are around these here parts!
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I’ve only seen snakes in the bush over here, apart from small ‘slug-eaters’ in the garden, but the hens have kept them at bay!
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They are there though… hiding… so I’m led to believe…
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Walk loudly!!
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Indeed! And I have been today… stomping and splashing through the puddles! 🙂
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Hope you were wearing your wellies!
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Nope… dress shoes (if that’s what they’re called… not boots or anything!) 🙂 Got caught in a downpour! And loved it! 😃
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I love how you do these.
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Thank you, Lisa!
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Superb. Young Owab is smart. Enjoyed reading the chapter.
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Thanks, Kritika! Owab and Aquila make another great team 🙂
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Dangers lurk… off to the next! Great stuff!
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Based on a close encounter with one of these… knew I’d work it in somewhere!
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