‘I lost him!’ Gary panted through the side window of the van, ‘I followed him into the park but he jumped over the wall… I think he’s back in the house,’ his eyes slid to the building where Patterson and his cronies were waiting; one of their number had also just pitched up, red-cheeked from running.
A nerve in Patterson’s temple twitched as he took out his keys and strode over to his car; beckoning to two of his crew, he indicated the now-open boot: one retrieved a crow-bar and the other a stubby-handled axe.
‘They’re going in!’ Gary’s voice rose half an octave with anxiety as the front door began to splinter.
As the door gave way, Joey launched himself over the banister, kicking wildly, taking two of the intruders down as he swung to the floor; spinning away from the man who was wielding the axe and snatching the crow-bar from where it’d fallen; with a mighty roar, Joey raised the crow-bar, smashing it against bone and flesh, Patterson was the last to crumple.
Joey stumbled outside, allowing the crow-bar to clatter to the ground.
‘In here, mate!’ Gary beckoned from the open back door of the van.
Written in response to two challenges:
Di of Pensitivity 101’s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge: ANXIETY, CHEEK, NERVE
Denise Farley of Girlie On The Edge’s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt: KEY
Photo credit: illustration from a book somewhere on my bookshelves which has mysteriously disappeared🐪
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A ripping tale Chris, nicely tensioned.
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Thanks very much, Paul!
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this is just so great………………………….
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Thanks very much, Di. Those words were a gift!
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Next week’s are already scheduled.
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🙂
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Fisticuffs, damaged doors, daring escapes, multiple characters and rescue opportunities all in six sentences. Fabulous, Chris!
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That was a fun episode to write! Thanks, Tom 🙂
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Some blert will end up in the ozzy!
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More like 6!
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This is great addition to the story Chris. Full on action
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Hehe! First time I’ve written a fight scene in a single sentence 🙂 Thanks Sadje!
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You’re welcome Chris. Well done.
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🤗🙏
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💞
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I’m breathless from reading this without taking a breath!
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A few semi-colons do nothing for the breathing! Thanks, Val 🙂
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This episode is right up there with something that would happen to Tommy Beresford. Love it! 😀
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It is rather Tommy-esque! 🙂
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You capture so much in such a short space here, Chris. I’m a little breathless!
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It was certainly a bit of a challenge this week. Thanks, Chris 🙂
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Love how the rising tension pulls the reader in, Chris 🙂 Crisp bone-crunching action.
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Ouch! Thanks, Tom
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I didn’t expect that from the hapless Joey!
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I think the camel might have something to do with it, Liz!
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Ah, that explains it!
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😉🐪
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Their weapons were used against them. I wonder where Gary is going to take him.
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Good question, Frank!
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As Raymond Babbitt would say, ‘Violence, violence!’
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This author is usually such a peaceful person, too!
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Yikes! Joey sure dug deep, did what he had to do. The tension and action are non-stop!
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Thanks, D. All that mayhem over in a sentence!
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An action-packed chapter this week, Chris! I get the feeling Joey’s just gone from the frying pan to the fire 😬
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Thanks, Susan. We have a number of possible scenarios for next week; nothing is fixed yet!
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Fingers crossed for Joey!
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😁
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That is frightening. There is so much unexpected violence these days, I’m trying to prepare myself should it be necessary. Go Joey!
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I didn’t know Joey had it in him, he’s always been more of a ‘let’s leg it’ guy. I guess it must be the camel’s influence 😉
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An intense and action-packed story, Chris! Well done!
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Thanks very much, Eugenia!
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Well, Chris, that violence didn’t so much escalate as explode!
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I didn’t want to hang around to see the resulting carnage!
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Fantastic again
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Thanks very much, Paul!
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Joey! Dude!
Excellent action scene. Rising tension, I think I saw another commentor write.
(It’s not secret that I get as much from studying the technique (of other Sixarians) as do from the entertainment of the stories themselves. Gonna have to try more of what I think of as ‘live action’ such as what I see in this episode.)
cool
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I’m looking forward to reading that, Clark!
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Now i’m out of breath!
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I was too, Mimi!
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A wild action adventure!
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Great to see you over here! I’m pleased you enjoyed, S.
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Wow, that was dramatic!
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Thanks, Keith! I’m still rather stunned. 😉
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So cool Chris, just caught up with the last couple of episodes I missed, each building the tension to this week’s episode of pacey action and violence… so pleased Gary was at hand in the van! I wonder if Patterson, though crumpled, is not entirely out?
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Thanks, Ford! A man like Patterson is almost bound to bounce back I suspect.
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The Camel awakens! And feeds on adrenalin and violence!? It would appear that’s part of it… I think, lol
Great bit of action, Chris!
That’s one jade camel Joey’s walking around with. Can’t wait to discover it’s origins.
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Thanks, Denise!
The camel’s origins seem to be cloaked within its dark and murky past, although we can see the power it holds. Cynthia (who was first to cross the fourth wall in an out-take from this series) was always rather vague about where the camel came from. All that I could get out of her was that it was once given to her by an admirer, who subsequently came to a sticky end…
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But is Gary trustworthy? I have my doubts after all that Kung-Fu fighting!
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We shall see… 😉
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A ripping tale, Chris.
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Thanks, Robbie!😊
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[…] improve our own word skills. By imitation, if not education. In any event, last week Chris wrote this installment in her serial story, ‘The Jade Camel’ that was pure action, from start to finish. So, […]
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