© Ayr/Gray
‘Please can I have my life back,’ she said. ‘Is it too much to ask?’
She can stride around the garden and she can run up and down the stairs, several times.
She’s so fit but she can’t go out.
But there’s no one. No one at all.
Quiet, very quiet, she thinks.
She looks at the big door; the one that opens in the street, and she looks back in the hall, for a moment.
Then slowly, very slowly, she opens the door, just a tiny crack.
She opens a little more – a creaking sound – then nothing.
She looks out, staring left and right.
‘Shall I come out?’
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Posted for The Unicorn Challenge, a magical challenge hosted by Jenne Gray and C E Ayr, where they provide a photo and we, in turn, provide up to 250 words.
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Very brave and perhaps this time she can step foot outside into the street (Agoraphobia?)
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Could be…😉
Thanks, Di.
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🙂
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Break on through to the other side!
So sings Jim and The Doors.
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Perfect! Thanks, Liz.
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I just thought she would step out, and there, she has her life back: She Is Free!
However, very mysterious…😉🤗🤙💖
PS: the owner of the video didn’t allow it to be played in Germany!😁
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I guess she could go either way, but I prefer she gets her freedom😉🤗💛
Sorry about the video. Maybe ‘The Clash’ are too British?🤔 What a pity – I saw them back in 1979!
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You built the tension beautifully and even at the end there was the sense of indecision! I do hope she has the courage to flee!
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Yes, I’m hoping that too! Thanks, Val.
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An interesting story …. great music 💜
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I’m glad that you enjoyed that, Willow💛
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I did 😀
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I hope she has the courage leave Chris. If she stays their trouble will be “double.”
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Yes, I think you’re right! Thanks, Darnell.
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Perhaps she should try at least! A suspenseful story
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Let’s hope so! Thank you, Sadje💛
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You’re always welcome Chris 💖
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best thing about doors: they are creatures of perspective. One person’s closing is another’s opening.
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Exactly! – in or out – where are we..?
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Tightly written and tense, Chris, leaving us wondering…
And the inimitable Joe Strummer, always a real treat!
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Thanks, CE – shame about JS since his not around anymore, but still wonderful!
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Come out, come out, wherever you are.
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Let’s hope to!
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As soon as I saw the title of your post, “Should I Stay or Should I Go” started playing in my head. I always like The Clash. A lot. Of course I had to watch the video! I loved your microfiction story. I’m answering the speaker’s question with a yes.
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I’m so glad that you enjoyed that! Thanks, Liz!
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You’re welcome, Chris!
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Oh my word, I love this one! I immediately thought of you “coming back” after your stroke. The phrase “Please can I have my life back” evokes so many emotions.
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Oh yes, you got it completely right. That was/is me. Thank you for everything, Debra. 🤗
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I love this, Chris.
You’re the only person who used the door for coming out, and I read the first line as you speaking.
There’s a build up of courage as the story goes on.
And ‘Yes, yes – please come out!’ is what I want to shout.
A beautiful piece.
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Thank you so much, Jenne.
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Beautiful and touching, Chris! Yes, come out 💖
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Thanks so much, Susan! 😊🤗
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I enjoyed the mystery in the story, but I do hope that freedom is the ultimate result. :-) An intriguing story, Chris.
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Aww, thanks so much, Diana.
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What a dilemma – perfectly able to ‘come out’ yet held back by only fear, I suspect. This could apply to so many people who fear to move out, or on, into challenging territory. I can feel the torment of her indecisive state.
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A dilemma is always difficult, isn’t it?
Thank you, Margaret
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She went out and had a great time 😊
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Oh yes, let’s hope so. Thanks, Maria.
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Hi Chris, this is intriguing and open to interpretation. For me, it is about sharing ideas with society – should I or shouldn’t I? Especially if they are not main stream.
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Good point, Robbie – there are several different interpretations in this one.
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My pleasure
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Perfect song for this, I wonder, come out maybe but I remember the Butch Cassidy movie…
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Ah, good one – Butch Cassidy and Sundance Kid – I can see that last scene…
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Great story, Chris and love the song pairing💕
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Thanks so much, Cindy!💛
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I almost missed this one–I LOVE it! Am I correct that the person speaking has agoraphobia? Or totally wrong?
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Thank you so much, V. It could be agoraphobia, although I’ve left it a bit open (as usual for me)😉
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That door gives me so many dark feelings. I think I’d peep and go in too but I’d first update my will.😅 Loved your piece, Chris.
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Excellent – and you made be laugh! Thanks so much, Jude😊
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My pleasure, Chris.
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Going out after any type of recovery can be tricky. But this piece reminds me more of a curious child left to fend for themselves. Lovely door. Historical?
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So many questions in that huge old door… that was great fun.
Thanks, Jules!
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Reminds me of some doors I saw years ago in Fiuggi, Italy (Very old town).
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