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The Facility #3

Chris Hall57 Comments

Through barely-open eyelids you stare up at the red eye of the camera, deliberating – why are they watching? what do they want? – yet, despite the threat, you find yourself beginning to doze off; the lights dim, and the soft mattress ushers you into the peaceful comfort of slumber.

The click of the key in the lock startles you awake, the room brightens, and the door opens to reveal the homely-looking nurse accompanied by a blank-faced orderly, also dressed in white – another unsmiling type – just like the administrator at the reception desk; in fact, they look strangely alike.

Under the nurse’s neutral stare, and consciously not looking at the eye of the camera in the corner, you swing your legs from the bed and sit up, while the blank-faced orderly manoeuvres a wheel-chair into the room and escorts you to it with a firm and forceful grip. He whisks you from the room and along the sterile bright-white corridor, following in the nurse’s efficient footsteps; now, turning a corner, you arrive at a pair of doors which slide open at your approach: an elevator.

The nurse’s broad figure blocks your view of the control panel, so as the elevator descends and remembering your room is seven floors up from ground level, you carefully count as floor after identical floor flits past the vision panels in the dull metallic doors.

Ten floors down, the doors open into a dark void; a scent, reeking of menace, fills the air.

Confused? You might be! Read previous episodes of The Facility here.

Written in response to two challenges:

– Di of Pensitivity101‘s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge – TYPE, BEGINNING, ESCORT
– Denise Farley of GirlieOnTheEdge‘s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt – CENTER / CENTRE

Photo credit: Scott Webb on Unsplash

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57 thoughts on “The Facility #3”

  17. Excellent (continuation of a) Serial Six!*

    Nice world-building, through the direct experience of the character… via 2nd person POV! (surely the most challenging and intimidating of the POVeseses.)

    cool

    *technically, the pacing of the action, the rising of the … energy or whatever the word for the action, though not limited to the physical

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  19. Yeah, it’s not looking good for this 2nd Person character at all (but I’m a believer in some hope, somewhere along the line, so who knows if an escape might present itself later?).
    I’m getting a vibe that the staff might be clones, or some sinister family cult….
    Good one, Chris 😎

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  23. And so the suspense continues, Chris.
    You’re building it up so well, with wee deepenings of the protagonist’s assimilation into the sterile surroundings they don’t understand – the wheelchair – balanced by their effort to remain connected to outside reality.
    I say ‘their’ – I have no idea if this is a male or a female – or if it even matters.

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