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The Jade Camel #16

Chris Hall60 Comments

Previously

Ceridwen gazed out of the open window watching the pink May blossom float like confetti over the path outside her flat and inhaling the yeasty smell from Cain’s Brewery, which was carried on the same soft breeze; Cullen, purring on her lap, stretched out his front paws, kneaded her thigh for a moment, then curled up again, his purr drifting to silence, only to be replaced by a louder, throatier purr as a sleek, midnight-blue Silver Shadow glided to a halt outside; a vehicle which was definitely out of place in the neighbourhood.

The driver’s door opened and an immaculately dressed silver-haired man got out, carefully adjusting his white shirt cuffs a precise half-inch beyond his grey-wool sleeves as he watched four strange squat little men descend from the car.

Ceridwen craned forward and Cullen sprung from her lap, jumping onto the window sill to observe the scene below.

As the four little men gathered around him, the silver-haired man stared upwards, his gaze meeting Ceridwen’s; Cullen’s tail began to twitch.

The first of the strange little men advanced to the front door and applied a doughy finger to the bell labelled five.

A low growl stirred in Cullen’s throat.

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Written in response to two challenges:

Di of Pensitivity 101’s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge: DOUGH, KNEAD, YEAST
Denise Farley of Girlie On The Edge’s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt: CONFETTI

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60 thoughts on “The Jade Camel #16”

  8. Rather engaging installment this week. And cranking up of the tension from ‘growing’ to ‘impending’. Very well done in the ‘visuals’ department.
    ‘specially loved: “…applied a doughy finger to the bell labelled five.”

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  14. Uh oh… Cullen and Ceridwen are both picking up on the vibes, and it seems the well-dressed silver-haired man is picking up their vibes too!
    At least it’s nearly next week already, Chris! 🙂

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  16. Ceridwen knew this day would arrive. I look forward to hearing what the silver haired man has to say.
    I’m thinking Cullen might take issue with the 4 squat men if they try to enter the apartment.
    Another cliff hanger, Chris 🙂

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  18. Ooh, no good can come of this! Such great suspense, Chris. And that ‘doughy finger’ quite made me squirm. 😉 The adjusting of those shirt cuffs is chilling in the extreme. Amazing how a small gesture like that can convey so much. You’re a real word-wizard!

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  20. Oh no! The little men are advancing to N° 5… “a doughy finger to the bell labelled five.” is such a sinister line! 😱
    I hope our silver-haired accomplice had time to light his cigarette with a certain Ronson lighter, before following those little men !!!!!

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