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The Jade Camel #17

Chris Hall80 Comments

Previously

Gary paced the floor in front of his girlfriend, Gina, struggling to regain his composure after speaking to Joey – the moment the interview had ended he’d grabbed his jacket and sprinted back to their flat, ‘I have to get the camel off Joey!’

‘Aye, aye, what’s the shouting about?’ Bob entered the sitting room breathing heavily, having taken the stairs two at a time, followed by Fingers, his pet monkey, ‘we only took a little detour to fetch that paper for me Nan.’

‘Bob, mate, I need your help… it’s about the camel,’ Gary grabbed his friend’s arm, ‘we have to hurry!’

A moment later, Gary and Gina piled into Bob’s van, ‘assuming we get the camel back, we need to make a plan to get rid of it, we can’t dump something like that in the trash,’ she shouted, gripping an agitated Fingers as they sped off.

Bob pulled in behind a large midnight-blue car; the man who was leaning against its glossy bonnet calmly lit a cigarette with an elegant silver lighter and turned towards them, a malevolent glint in his blue-grey eyes.

‘One thing at a time,’ said Bob, ‘we have to get past him first.’

next episode

Written in response to two challenges:

Di of Pensitivity 101’s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge: DUMP, TRASH, REGAIN
Denise Farley of Girlie On The Edge’s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt: DETOUR

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Photo credit: illustration from a book somewhere on my bookshelves which has mysteriously disappeared🐪

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80 thoughts on “The Jade Camel #17”

  1. And the action ramps up, can envisage a car and van chase through the city of Liverpool now… overhead cameras, stunt doubles, explosions, grinning chimps, smashed market stalls, a vehicle plunging into the Mersey (that’s one way to get rid of the Jade Camel!).

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  16. Damn! Nothing like ‘action colliding with action’. Your control is such that, even with your excellent economy of words, we’re dragged along and stop (somewhat abruptly) all of which contributes to that sense of cascading events. Leading to what, is, of course, the ice on the cake.

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  17. I’m breathless here! And there’s that silver fox again, right where he isn’t needed. I might need that Time Travel tomahawk myself to get to next week and find out what happens, otherwise it’s going to be a tense week! Great writing, Chris!

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  18. I hope Gary has a plan for that camel. Not thinking it’s going to take kindly to being “disposed of”, lol
    And then there’s the matter of the well dressed man with the blue-grey eyes. Obstacles? Na-ah, lol

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