I fall through a shower of effervescent light particles and land with a jolt, my nostrils filling with the simple scent of sandalwood overlaying the smell of decay. My uncle’s kindly face comes into focus, he sits in his library, surrounded by his cherished possessions; the lines on his face are entrenched, his shoulders stooped; he has aged – a decade or more. I glance at my hands, the still-smooth skin suggests I have not.
‘Hasten to the Stones,’ he commands. I rise and approach him, but I’m dismissed.
Megaliths murmur:
On the Eve of the Dawning
Gaia greets your return.
Photo by unsplash.com/@artifactflash
Written in response to two challenges:
– Di of Pensitivity101‘s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge – KIND, POSSESIONS, SIMPLE
– Denise Farley of GirlieOnTheEdge‘s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt – EFFERVESCENT
I have also set myself the additional challenges of confining my piece to 100 words exactly and writing this, now ongoing story, in the haibun form. Just for fun!
Pop over to the #SSS Link Up Party for more Six Sentence Stories
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This is haunting. Nicely written, Chris.
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Thank you, Jacqui!
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Haunting indeed… and very good
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This is taking another direction. I love how you say so much with so few words
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Thanks, Sadje! Trying to pull us back from the brink 😉
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Good going. You’re welcome my friend
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Exquisite poem and lovely photo, Chris! ❤ ❤ ❤ Love the Earth Day theme! All the best! ❤
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Thank you, Cheryl, my hope with the series was to draw attention to the plight of Mother Earth, and explore how she might seek to redress the balance.
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Terrific Chris!
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Thanks, Di 🙂 and thanks for those three words!
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You are most welcome. I love the way you’re using them!
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I’m enjoying bending them to my will!
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It’s great!
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A very beautiful and spiritual piece, well done, Chris.
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Thanks so much, Mason 🙂
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You’re welcome.
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go around
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Everything does…
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sure does so seize this day.
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I am impressed with the amazing agility across multiple challenges, including your own. I feel like I should be challenging myself in some way like reading the post upside down or with one eye shut.
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Thanks so much, Geoff! 😀
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Excellent work in creating that feeling of being carried forward in time/in a process, like the reverse of the nightmare we’ve all had of trying to escape the unspecified threat but our legs must force their way through something both invisible and resistant.
Well evoked.
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Thanks, Clark! I’m thinking our nightmare may be coming to an end fairly soon. Unless of course, something puts a metaphorical spanner in the works…
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Love where you took this. There’s something about the smell of an old library which breeds good narrative!
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Ah, that must be it! Channelling my inner library 😉
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The adventure is not quite finished, then. Well written chapter and all in all a very fascinating ongoing story.
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Not quite finished Mimi, there’s still a little more to wring out of this one!
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Ah, we return to our post-apocolyptic landscape. I was glad to see the uncle again.
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I think the uncle may still have a part to play… not sure what yet!
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I like the contrast between the aging of the uncle while the narrator had not aged at all. There is a mystery in going to those stones. I like that photo of the sunrise (or set) against those monoliths.
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Thanks Frank! Those stones hold many mysteries…
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The uncle, aged by a decade? Very nice spin! Totally unexpected. So in the interim of those 10 years, Mother Nature exacted her revenge. Now what?!
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Good question, Denise! What will arise like a phoenix from the ashes? We’ll see 🙂
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A very poetic SSS. I was try to imagine “my nostrils filling with the simple scent of sandalwood overlaying the smell of decay,” but then again decided to not go there. 🙂
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Best to stop at the sandalwood, Pat 🙂
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Thought provoking!🤔🧐
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Oh good! 😉
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I love this, especially the Haiku!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Hmmm… I wonder if Mother Nature and Father Time are working together? I like how we’ve returned, Chris… almost… 🙂
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Could be, Tom!
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Mmm, beautiful writing! But I think I may have come in to the middle of an on-going story. I’d love to find the rest?
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Thanks so much, Jenne! The link is up there somewhere, but to save you searching, here it is. You’ll find all the episodes here: https://lunasonline.wordpress.com/stories/dark-secret/
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Oh, thank you so much, Chris. I look forward to catching up!
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Just watch out for plot holes! 😉
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Oooh – thanks for the link. I’ve loved each episode as they arise but my memory can’t keep up with everyone’s storylines week on week. 🤣
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So pleased you’re enjoying it! I can’t guarantee the ongoing story runs seamlessly 😉
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Mystical and magical.
Love this, Chris
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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Beautifully done!
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Thanks, Nicole 🙂
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No surprise the work is not over yet – but a big surprise Uncle aged 10 years and our adventurer didn’t.
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I know, strange isn’t it? I’m sure we’ll find out how that happened soon. 😉
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much enjoyed this 🙂
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I’m delighted you did! 🙂
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The fleeting moment where one is trapped in time and then propelled forward! Yes, a lovely launch into a story indeed, Chris xxxxxxx
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It’s that magic thing at work… or at least something like that 😉
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